Poetry Prompt from dVerse Poets Pub “Poetics: InterActions.” I chose to do Gretchen Leary’s music prompt. Here goes. (“The Very Thought of You by Billie Holiday, the first singer I fell in love with)
THE VERY THOUGHT OF YOU
The rain is pattering on the overhang
black coffee in the air
the smell of paint from
my little kitchen I just painted
Emma is asleep in her crib upstairs
as Lady Day dips and drones
and flattens the back of my throat
as we sing
…the very thought of you…
it is July in my prime
I go outside, barefoot,
smelling the wet pavement
hissing off the avenue
and sneak into the neighbor’s
yard, near the alley
and pick as many lilacs
as I can carry, the water
dripping onto my face and hair
…Emma, my girl, I’m a mama…
….I see your face in every flower,
your eyes in stars above…
Back inside I take out
blue mason jars and old bottles
I’ve collected since high school
and fill them all, cluttering
windowsills, tables, the steps
swaying my hips
to the scaling piano
to the motion in my life
everything where it should be
everything right
...I’m livin’ in a kind of daydream…
…I’m happy as a queen…
rain streaks the glass
I think of how I’ll tell her this
when she’s older–how her mama
was a spring of a girl, dancing
to muffled jazz, picking lilacs in the rain…
…and foolish though it may seem…
…to me, that’s everything….
very cool, atmoshpheric write..love all the scents..the coffee..paint..lilacs..the wet pavement…cool soft rhythm in this as well… i sing along..
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oh wow…you really lived within this song…love the feel of this amy…the sneaking into your neighbors yard to steal flowers…ha…and i think you should tell her when she is older…this is a very happy moment…smiles…
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thanks Brian 🙂
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The poem does strike all the senses….excellent write IMHO.
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A lovely reflections on those days – specially like these lines:
how her mama
was a spring of a girl, dancing
to muffled jazz, picking lilacs in the rain…
I enjoyed the music link too, (reminds me of my dad’s music)
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thanks Heaven, that was my fav part too 🙂
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This reads so smoothly, it makes me want to dance! Love the rhythm and the story here.
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This is beautiful; and I am sure that your daughter will appreciate knowing some day
how her mama
was a spring of a girl, dancing
to muffled jazz, picking lilacs in the rain…
Maybe you can start by showing her this poem!
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…a true inspired write that introduces your beautiful heart… loved the song choice i find really touching not only the song cover but also the very thought of its message inside & when sang… smiles… enjoyed it…thalks…
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Oh thank you so much Kelvin!
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I loved the imagery of the lilacs being picked in the rain, and it made me reflect that I haven’t been out in the rain for months (drought where I am). I do like getting wet when there’s no rush to be anywhere in particular..
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The pacing of the vivid descriptions is frighteningly perfect. I was swept up and away as I read, and delivered back to the reality of the kitchen as I read. It lit up my mommy heart, too. Lets tell our children so many beautiful things, at every age. 🙂
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What a lovely tribute to your daughter and to Billie Holiday. This poem reminds me of how I feel about my sweet girl.
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I really liked this. The tempo, the voice, the over-flowing lilacs from collections of jars, the smell of rain, the thought of future conversations with daughter. Excellente. And the song was/is very special.
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Gorgeous work.
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Ah…Billie Holiday evokes such strong emotions for me and I see how much it means to you….just lovely Amy.
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Very fine poem. Thanks so much.
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This is a side of you what I really like. I know there’s sadness and darkness, but there’s also so much beauty and mystery in this life and you’ve found it here. Love the imagery and the action here. Usually (less talented) writers get hung on the details and the narrative just comes to a thudding stop. Not here, my dear. Especially love that you have found the truest of all loves: in the service of another, in this case, beautiful Emma. Gorgeous! This am gorgeous! Big hugs and love to you! Mosk
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Thank you Mosk!!! I hate a great time writing it!
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