
(one shot Wednesday)
A night electric by the moon
she reaches beneath
the water, warm as a bath
and pulls down the lily’s stem
enough to drown
its glowing petals
beaming below the surface,
faded but brilliant
slip, farther down
slip, farther down
she pulls until it is a faded
white sun
there is a dark center
and she thinks of her mother,
her dark mouth open, airless
beneath the water
silent
she remembers the sound
of her voice
a radiant ache
the water breathes
she releases the lily and sits up
only to watch it slip
farther down, slip
away, as everything seemed to do
and it’s her face, then,
alone and pale
on the black surface
no center, no mouth
a dark stillness in the reeds
intense and lyrical– great job. check out my winter interludes at http://parolavivace.blogspot.com — they’ll cheer you up! xxxj
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very haunting yet soothing prose. Its flow is mezmorizing…nice job!
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Nice poem!
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Beautiful blending of theme and words. Read it three times and there’s still much left…progression from “..slip,farther down…” compelling and wraps the reader, pulling down into the poem like underwater weeds wrapping around the legs.
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Lovely, eerie, true to moonlight on water and memory and the inky wash of a poem’s resurrection of old voices. It does slip way down. Check out my recent post, “Longing,” goes at that place from a different point of departure.
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thanks so much Brendan! I like how you read it. I’m having trouble getting to yours. What’s your blog address?
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haven’t seen ya around in a while…hope you are doing well….
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Hey poet. Yay I’m alive. Been a rough couple of weeks but I’m back. Gotta love the ole bipolar. dammit. ah well. Yeah i haven’t written a poem in weeks and i feel so…wrong. 🙂 take care…and thanks for noticing my absence. I feel special. 🙂 love, amy jo
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beautiful and yet another haunting write..goes well with the image too
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Haunting is my word, also. Shivers.
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A beautiful and intense journey. Haunting
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so very lovely…and sweetly sad. a girl always yearns for her mother, doesn’t she?
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I don’t know but this reminds me of my mother. 😦
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“her voice / a radiant ache” Love these lines. And the ones about the bath warm water. Well done.
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Hi Amy – Just wanted to let you know that I came for a visit. Keep writing lovely poems.
Didi
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